What’s that marvellous Springsteen song? One step up, two steps back?
As I realised last week, any further movement in my attempted novel [beyond the first chapter, that is] was dependent upon my putting in the hours, working out a more detailed back story than the one I already had. So I took myself off to my new favourite coffee house in town [and no, I'm not about to name it, too difficult to get a seat already] and, between lattés, set to work. That evening, the results typed up, I gave a copy to my partner and asked her if she thought there was enough detail, could she follow what was going on, had I papered, sufficiently, over the cracks?
Assured that I had – much of it it read like a treatise on people trafficking, aside from anything else – next day I set to work. Chapter two, a little of chapter three and once more I ground to a halt. “What’s the matter?” my daughter asked, when she came home from school. “You look grumpy.” Understatement. I knew in my heart the pages I’d written were dead. To me, at least. Discovery of murder victim at the start of chapter one, then the investigation begins. I guess what I’d written might have passed muster, but it wasn’t interesting at all. Alive. Not to me. Check the CCTV, the files on the computer, blood types, DNA; findings of the post mortem; officers down on their knees, finger-tip searching for clues … No, I simply don’t care. I’ve done it all too many times before. [But this IS a crime novel, you say. Isn't it?] Well, yes … but I cannot bring myself to write about it in any detail, the police investigation, I simply cannot.
So – forget the back story for a moment, go back to what you imagined you did want to write about. A man, somewhat disengaged from the world, a policeman, though not operating as one – Cordon, from the previous book, Far Cry – goes in search of a woman who has gone missing and may be in danger, a woman for whom he feels, in some unclear way, responsible. For reasons of plot [yes, there is a plot] his search crosses over with the investigation into the murder which occurs in chapter one [and which has, again for reasons of plot] to happen first. Clear so far?
What I thought I’d have to do, what I’d begun doing, was set the police investigation into the murder in motion and follow it through several chapters, then introduce Cordon and his quest, keep cutting between the two until they coincide. For reasons stated above, I realised that was a bad idea.
What I should be able to do, I realised, was to briefly announce the murder and the detective who will lead that investigation [Karen Shields, from Ash & Bone and Cold in Hand], then cut straight to Cordon, don’t show any of the nuts and bolts of that investigation at all; let the reader assume they’re going on out of plain sight, behind the lines. Follow Cordon primarily, Cordon and the girl. That’s what you’re interested in. When their story comes into contact with the murder investigation, let it be seen from their point of view, how it affects them.
That’s what I’ve been doing, yesterday and today, writing, rewriting the first five or six thousand words. By the end of next week, the week after possibly, I should know if this is going to work. And if it’s not, abandon it. Step away, start something different, something else.
Watch this space – let you know.